Monday, 9 June 2008

A trip for life


Hannah glanced nervously at her watch. It was 11.54 and the night train for Bangalore was leaving in 6 minutes. She peered along the dimly platform, searching for a familiar figure in faded jeans,carrying a well-worn rucksack.
5 minutes.
'Why isn't he here already? What happened? He had promised...'

4 minutes.
'Nothing. Everybody is already inside the train. His cellphone is turned off, I can't call him...'

3 minutes.
'Ok, he isn't coming. Should I stay or should I go?'

2 minutes.
'I do not care. I'm going, with or without him!'

1 minute.
She was inside the train, trying to find her seat. Her mind couldn't stop thinking about a reason that explained his behaviour. He wouldn't do this, he promised...
Someone opened the carriage's door. She turned to see who it was. A tall boy with blue eyes, red hair, brown t-shirt, faded jeans and tennis-shoes.
'Michael!'
'Hi Mary. Sorry, I'm so late... you wouldn't image what happened to me...'

'I was so worried! Hum...What?'

'The taxi driver freaked out! I had to call an ambulance and caught another taxi... I can't believe that I arrived just in time.'

'You phone is turned off, I tried to call you a million times!'
'I know, after calling for the ambulance it went dead...no battery...'
'Aren't you forgetting something? Now you're here, give me a kiss!'

They kissed. She was relieved with his arrival, couldn't bare the idea of going without him. He couldn't stop thinking about the poor taxi driver, the way the car stopped, his face going white, his eyes closing. He hoped the man was ok. He told the doctor to send a message giving him news. When they arrive, the first thing he's going to do is put his mobile on charge.
12.14. Hannah was sleeping. They were supposed to arrive by sunset. Michael decided to sleep a few hours.

3 comments:

Pilar said...

Not fare! I want to know more!

Ás de Espadas said...

See what Pilar said? She stole my words.

I'll add a few. You're mean! =(


=P

Joana Soares said...

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:P It's delicious!!

Please write the second part...

What really happen in the taxi?
What's going to happen next?

I love the writing concept: minutes + thoughts + narrator
And the image you used to illustrate it… good choice. (Y) =D

Kiss Kiss...
Bang Bang, Girl :D